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The chart below shows the expenditure in pounds of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart demonstrates the spending on consumed products by
citizes
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citizens
 in
pound
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pounds
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 of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and France, in the year 2010.
Overall
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, both countries share similar features
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, like
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like they have
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such as having
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 their highest proportion of money
spend
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spent
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 on cars, showing the high need
of
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for
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 it.
While
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 perfumes
,
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apply
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has
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have
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 the lowest number among the other products in the pair
countries
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of countries
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. In France, the largest
number of
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expenditure was on cars by about 400000 pounds.
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, computers came in the second
place
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place,
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to be
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with
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 approximately 370000.
Subsequently
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, books and perfumes were the third and fourth level by 300000 and 200000,
respectivly
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respectively
. Cameras had the smallest
protion
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proportion
 of money by 150000 in 2010. In
UK
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the UK
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, massive
expending
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expenditure
 was
toward
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on
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 cars by 450000.
In contrast
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, the smallest amount on consumer goods was on perfumes
around
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, around
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roughly
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apply
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149000.

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