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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

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The given line graph illustrates the
production
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 of
fruit
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 levels in four different countries, namely
Spain
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,
Turkey
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,
France
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 and
Germany
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years
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 between 1970 and 2010. Units are measured in millions of
tonnes
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.
Overall
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,
Spain
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 has the highest
fruit
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production
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 despite a slight decline in its output,
while
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France
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 and
Turkey
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 had an upward trend.
In contrast
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,
Germany
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 had a sharp decrease over the years.
Years between
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 1970 and 1980, both
fruit
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production
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 in
Turkey
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 and
Spain
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 rose moderately and in 1980, before falling,
Spain
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 approximatlely twofold the
fruit
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production
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 in
Turkey
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 by nearly 5.5
million
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tones
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.
However
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,
Spain
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 witnessed a dramatic decrease after it reached its peak
by
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of
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 nearly 6.2
million
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tonnes
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 in 1980. After 1980,
Turkey
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 showed an upward pattern until 2010 by around 3.5
million
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tonnes
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, which is the
second highest
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second-highest
production
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 level in the chart. Regarding
France
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 and
Germany
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, their
production
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 figures followed a more erratic and downward
paths
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path
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. In 1970,
Germany
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's
fruit
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production
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 stood at approximately 2.8
million
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tonnes
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, but experienced a significant decline over the next two decades, reaching
to
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its lowest point of about 1.2
million
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tonnes
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 in 2010.
France
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,
on the other hand
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, showed a
flactuating
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fluctuating
 trend. From 1970 to 1980, it witnessed a smooth increase. After
relatively
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a relatively
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 stable
,
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period
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 between 1980 and 1990,
Fruit
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production
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 in
France
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 showed a sharp increase to over 2
million
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tonnes
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, followed by a brief dip and a final recovery to nearly 3
million
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tonnes
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 by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, fruit, spain, turkey, france, germany, tonnes, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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