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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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Recently
food
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 wastage has become a very common ordeal, espcially
food
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 bought from shops and ordered from restaurants. People tend to not think twice before throwing
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 anymore either. In my opinion, I believe the frequent discard of
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 is
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 people ordering or buying too much
food
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 that they physically cannot ingest.
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 occurs whenever individuals are in a group setting,
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 in families I have noticed my family especially my father orders a lot of
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 knowing well that we won't be able to finish it. It's the feeling of pride and happiness that makes a human order more to show their wealth and joy by ordering more
food
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. Especially in special occasions like parties, festivals
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 they are all bought in excess amounts as it takes the form of not just something edible but something way more meaningful
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 it results in a lot of it being disposed
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. Another reason could be buying for the sake of content creation, to showcase one's plate to the world. Many influencers and content creators find healthy meals and groceries to show the world of their healthy life, which in reality is them throwing away their 'healthy meals' and pursuing whatever they desire.
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 of social media has caused a lot of pretending and
food
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 wastage. In order to reduce the
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 disposing, I believe we as humans need to be more mindful with our
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. One should always order as much as they can physically eat
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 if it still ends up exceeding their
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 of being thrown
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 it should be packaged and refrigerated to be eaten for later.
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,
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 should not
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 be a mere source of entertainment, these influencers need to be more grateful
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 the
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 they eat and see it as a blessing.
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 I would like to say,
Food
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 is a staple need in one's life and it should be eaten, respected, donated but not thrown away.

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Answer both parts more fully. You explain why people waste food well, but the part about what can be done is shorter. Add 1 or 2 more clear ways to cut food waste.
coherence and cohesion
Use more direct topic sentences. Start each main part with a clear main idea so the reader can follow your points more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simpler and clearer way. Some lines are long and hard to follow. Break long ideas into shorter sentences.
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Give examples that are more general, not only personal. Your family example is good, but one more wider example would make the answer stronger.
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Keep your focus on food waste. The point about content creators is interesting, but it needs a clearer link to the main question.
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You answer both parts of the question, so your essay stays on topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear ending, and the conclusion matches your main ideas.
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You use examples, such as family meals and social media, to support your points.
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Your ideas move in a clear order: reasons first, then ways to reduce waste.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste food
  • throw away
  • go bad
  • meal plan
  • shopping list
  • special offer
  • large pack
  • left-over food
  • date label
  • portion size
  • take food home
  • store food
  • freeze food
  • use up food
  • safe to eat
  • busy life
  • save money
  • eat out
  • order take-away
  • reduce waste
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