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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The three charts represent the percentage of various
transportation
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modes of transportation
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 used,
such
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 as private cars, public transport, recreational
vehicles
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, and lorries and other commercial
vehicles
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 in the United Kingdom in three different
years
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, namely 1965, 1985, and 2005.
Overall
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, the private cars had dominancy throughout
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years
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the years
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 compared to other
kind
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kinds
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 of transportation,
whereas
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 the least
transportation used
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used transportation
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 was recreational
vehicles
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 for all three recorded
years
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. The private cars, which
is
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are
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 shown
by
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in
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 blue
color
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apply
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, gradually rose at the beginning with 40% to the end of the recorded year with 60%. The popularity, specifically, has a huge increasement at the first two
years
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, where the popularity rose
for
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by
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 about 15%.
On the other hand
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, two
kind
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kinds
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 of
vehicles
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,
such
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 as public transport, and recreational
vehicles
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 dramatically fell
at
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in the
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 second year, 1985, with 5% and 10% decreasement, respectively.
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, these two transportations slightly climbed with
a
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at
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 least
proportion
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a proportion
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2
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of 2
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-3% in 2005. The other vehicle, which is the lorries and other commercial
vehicles
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, had a constant proportion, but notably fell at third year for 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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