The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given graph shows the information about the number of
students
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who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. The selected
students
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are Iranian, Greek and Turkish.
Overall
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, there are significant gaps between Greece and the others.
While
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Greek
students
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enrolled the most in the university in 2005
within
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, with
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180 people, Iran and Turkey
rated
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ranked
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the least, each
39
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with 39
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and 20.
However
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, as
the
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apply
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time goes
,
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on, Greek's
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Greek's
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the
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number
decreased
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of Greeks decreased
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rapidly in 2009
within
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to
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42
students
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when
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, when
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Iranian peaked in the same year. The rate of Turkey
almost
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is almost
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parallels
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parallel
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to
Iran
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that of Iran
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, which had the highest enrolment in 2009 too. The Greece and Iran student numbers met in 2007,
pointing
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reaching
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70 people. In that year, Turkish
rated
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students rated
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a bit more than the two, which was 87
students
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. There is a notable variation in Greece between 2006 and 2007,
which
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where the number of students
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students
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' number has dropped drastically
like
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, from
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158 to 70,
88
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and 88
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people declined.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enrolled
  • Enrollments
  • Trend
  • Steady increase
  • Initial increase
  • Decline
  • Sharp increase
  • Peaking
  • Noteworthy comparison
  • Contrasting trends
  • Period
  • Given period
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