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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given table compares information on consumer
expenditure
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 on three different categories, namely
food
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/
drinks
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/
tobacco
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, clothing/
footwear
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 and leisure/education in five different countries, including
Ireland
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, Italy,
Spain
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,
Sweden
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 and
Turkey
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 in 2002.
Overall
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, an uneven distribution
on
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of
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 customer spending can be seen in each country. In each country,
food
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/
drinks
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/
tobacco
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 constituted the bulk of the
expenditure
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while
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 leisure/education had the lowest proportion in all countries.
Initially
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, in the
food
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/
drinks
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/
tobacco
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 category, there was a marked preference in
Turkey
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 at 32.14%, followed closely by
Ireland
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 and
Spain
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, which accounted for 28.91% and 18.80%.
Food
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/
drinks
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/
tobacco
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 spending in Italy and
Sweden
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 had identically the same , with 16.36% and 15.77% respectively, representing the lowest proportions among the
unit
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units
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. Regarding
to
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apply
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expenditure
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 on clothing/
footwear
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, Italy had the maximum proportion at exactly 9%. In
Ireland
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,
Spain
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 and
Turkey
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, spending on clothing/
footwear
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 items
had
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was
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 nearly the same
by
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, with
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 a minor difference, accounting for 6.43% and 6.51%, and 6.63% , respectively.
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,
expenditure
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 on the clothing/
footwear
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 category
,
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in
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Sweden
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 represented the bottom of the table at 5.40%.
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, leisure/education items had the minimum proportion of
expenditure
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 compared to other segments. Despite its lower percentage of spending,
Turkey
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 led the table, accounting for 4.35%, leaving Italy and
Sweden
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 behind at 3.20% and 3.22%, respectively.
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,
Ireland
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 and
Spain
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 served as minorities at 2.21% and 1.98

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, food, drinks, tobacco, footwear, ireland, spain, sweden, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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