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Advertisements are important for a marketing strategy for sale of products? Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern life, the best way to sell
products
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 is
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advertisements
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through advertisements
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. I firmly agree with
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 opinion for several important reasons. The main reason of importance of
advertisements
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 is the opportunities for a wide view.
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,
people
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 can find out about new
product
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products
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 only from
advertisements
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and
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 it leads to
sale
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the sale
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 of companies'
products
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 effectively.
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,
advertisements
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 often attract the attention of many individuals
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also
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 get more information about
products
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.
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, with
advertisements
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 company make a good marketing strategy to involve the
costumers
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customers
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. Another reason is that
advertisements
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 usually give a positive emotion.
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 is because companies try to make
advertisements
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 more
colorful
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colourful
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 and useful.
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, it shows how their product can solve
people
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's
problem
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problems
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.
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, many
people
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 suffer
with
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from
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 skin problem and
advertisements
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 demonstrate some new product for skin care and promise that it
help
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 them.
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, many
people
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 will buy it and want the same results. It is another really working strategy In conclusion,
advertisements
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 play a
cricial
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critical
 role in marketing strategy to enhance the sale of
products
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.
People
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 often consider
advertisements
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 as
attractive
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an attractive
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 and useful way to
demostrate
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demonstrate
 some new
products
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Answer the question more fully. You agree, but you should say more about why ads are the best way, not only an important way.
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Make each main idea very clear. Some ideas are good, but they need simpler and more exact explanation.
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Use one clear example and explain it more. Your skin care example is relevant, but it needs a little more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. Keep this structure.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences are hard to follow because the grammar breaks the flow.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with one clear reason and one clear result. This will make the essay easier to follow.
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You clearly state your opinion in the first paragraph.
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You give two main reasons, which helps answer the question.
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You include an example about skin care products.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use simple linking words like 'In addition', 'Furthermore', and 'As a result'.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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