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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table provides data about age, average
income
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 per
person
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, and population below the
poverty
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 line in three states (
California
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,
Utal
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Utah
, and Florida) in the USA.
Overall
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, it is clear from the table that
California
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 registers the highest
income
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 per
person
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 , and the population below the
poverty
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 line records the highest
percentage
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 among all
given
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 states.
In contrast
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, Utal shows the lowest average
income
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 and the minimum
percentage
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 of
people
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 who live
under
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below the
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poverty
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 line. In
California
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, 17% and 13% are the percentages of
people
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 aged under 18 and over 60 , respectively, which are close together compared to other cities. The average
income
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 in
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 city is 23000 dollars per
person
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, recording the highest proportions among other places. In terms of Florida,
people
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 aged under 18 are formes 16%, and 23% is for
people
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 over 60.
This
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 figure doubles the
percentage
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 of the same group in
California
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.
Also
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, the
percentage
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 of
poverty
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 is almost 12%, and 22% is for the
income
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 per
person
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. In terms of Utal, the youth under 18 is 28%.
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,
this
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 city registers the minimum number of elderly
people
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%, and
poverty
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 level 9% compared to other states. The average
income
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 is 17,000 per
person
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. Utal presents 28% for
people
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 under 18%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, person, poverty, california, percentage, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Metrics
  • Economic conditions
  • Cost of living
  • Percentage
  • Poverty line
  • Demographics
  • Workforce composition
  • Income disparity
  • Correlation
  • Economic health
  • Social-economic challenges
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