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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

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Sector
Contributions
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 of India's gross domestic product have been depicted by the given change graph for four decades.
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, throughout
period
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the period
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 from 1960 to
2000
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2000,
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contributions
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 in
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industry
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the industry
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 and services sector witnessed growth, apart from agriculture, which declined over the entire period.
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, the
contributions
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 for agriculture swapped their statistical extremes with services. Two sectors experienced an upward trend in
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:
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Industry
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 and Services. At first
Industry
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 had
least
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contributions
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 in 1960 with only 17% before edging up to 20% in 1970, whereupon
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it remained
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 relatively stable in 25% by 2000.
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, it consistently occupied a moderate position over a 40-year timeframe. The
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Industry
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 have been presented as the second highest figure with 18% in 1960, only
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to experience a dramatic climb to over 60%
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 of the period.
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, the sector
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 for Agriculture had its maximum threshold in 1960 with more than 60%, yet
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 plummeted to under 20% in 2000.

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