The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

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The given chart depicts the data on contributions made by 3 specific sections to India’s gross domestic product between 1960 and 2000. It is clearly seen that

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the percentage of agriculture and industry witnessed considerable alterations

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while

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services underwent a slight rise with a rapid decrease. In the initial

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agriculture made the highest contributions ,

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became a dominant sector in the final period.

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Apr 29, 2026

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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

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Global warming is emerging as a great threat to human survival in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and suggest some solutions?

Homelessness in increasingly in many major city's around the world. What are the problem and give solutions.

Most high level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?