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The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050.

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the
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 graph illustrates
Chinas's
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China's
population
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 by
age
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group
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 starting in 1960 and consisting
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forecast to 2050.
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, the adult
age
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 was the largest
group
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throuhout
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throughout
 the
period
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, rising the peak around 2020 before declining.
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, the share of
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the young
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age
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 feel stedily,
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 the older
population
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 increased and is predicted to
surpess
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surpass
 the youngest
age
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group
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 by the end of the
period
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. In 196, children aged 0-14 made up the largest share of the
population
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, at around 45%.
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,
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 figure decreased consistently over the following decades, falling to 35% in 1990 and just under 25% in 2020. It is projected to decline
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, reaching 17.5% by 2025. The 15-64
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group
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 followed the opposite trend. It accounted for about 40% of the
population
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 in 1960, before rising steadily to around 60% in in 1990. The figure
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 continued to increase and reached a peak of roughly 70% in 2020. After that, it is forecast to fall gradually, ending the
period
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 at about 53%. Meanwhile, the proportion of people aged 65 and over remained
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relatively
 low until 2020,
incresing
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increasing
 slowly from around 5% to about 10%.
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,
this
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 figure is expected to rise more sharply after 2020, reaching around 25% in 2050 and
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 the youngest
group
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 by the end of the
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, group, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population
  • age group
  • forecast
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • fall
  • drop
  • decline
  • remain
  • stable
  • peak
  • reach a high point
  • the largest group
  • the smallest group
  • adult
  • children
  • older people
  • people aged 65 and over
  • people aged 15 to 64
  • people aged 0 to 14
  • over time
  • at the start
  • at the end
  • by 2050
  • from 1960 to 2050
  • is expected to
  • is projected to
  • a sharp rise
  • a steady fall
  • gradually
  • significantly
  • compared with
  • in contrast
  • while
  • overall
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