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Writing Samples
Band 4

You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: -give details of your visit to the restaurant -explain the reason for the celebration -say what was good about the food and the service.

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Dear
Restuarant
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Restaurant
 manager, I am writing to express my appreciation
about
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for
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 the details of your place. On
march
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March
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 21st, I came with friends to celebrate my birthday, as we had seen your place
at
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on
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 social media and we were excited to try
this
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 place. I would like to
compliement about
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compliment
 the ambience of the restuarant and it was very lively and soothing.
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, the food tastes delicious
and
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 it was served beautifully
as
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, as
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 it looks mouthwatering.
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, the hospitality which was presented by you and staff was very welcoming, polite and
freindly
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friendly
, which made our visit enjoyable. I am looking forward to
come
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 here again and recommend to my friends and family. Thank you for your response and consideration. Best Regards, Ms. Pal.

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task response
Add one more clear detail about the visit, like time, table, or meal.
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Say the reason for the celebration in a full clear way.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple clear links like also, because, and so.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph to one main point only.
coherence and cohesion
Check word forms and spelling to make ideas easy to follow.
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You answered all parts of the task.
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The tone is warm and polite for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a good order.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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