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the table below shows the result of survey in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university

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The table gives information about the outcomes of a
questionary
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questionnaire
 over the years 2000,2005 and 2010 about one university.
Overall
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,İt is
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 that there was a slight rise in the rates of
Teaching
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teaching
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 quality,Print
resources
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,
electronic
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and electronic
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resources
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resources,
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whereas
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 the opposite was true for the range of modules offered.
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Also
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 the consequences of Print
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was
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were
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 the highest indication over
all
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the entire
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 period. There was a sharp increase in the number of students for Electronic
resources
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which
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, which
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 accounted for 45
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 in 2000,
to
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72
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 in 2005 and 88
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 in 2010.It experienced a fluctuation in ratings for teaching
qualtiy
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quality
, which amounted to 65
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 in 2000,it went down to 63
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 in 2005,and rose to 69
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 in 2010.The percentages of Print
resources
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 grew slightly from 87
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 in 2000 to 88
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 in 2010,before
experienced
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 increase to 89
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 in 2005.
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,there was a sharp drop
for
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 range of modules offered
which
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, which
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 accounted for 32
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 in 2000,from 30
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 in 2005 to 27
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 in 2010.
However
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, the results of Buildings/teaching facilities remain stable in three years
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such
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 as 77
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 in 2000,2005 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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