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The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.

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The line graph compares the Gross Domestic Product (
GDP
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) in four countries: Bangladesh, Pakistan, Nepal, and Malaysia
in
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 billions of US
dollar
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dollars
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.
Overall
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, all countries
faces
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 a rise in their
GDP
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 except one. Malaysia recorded the highest
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,
while
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 Nepal had
lowest
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.
However
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, other countries saw a slight increase in their growth.
To begin
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 with, Nepal remained stable in all five years. Its
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 in 2010 was approximately 1 billlion dollar, which makes them lowest among all four nations. There was no change until 2015.
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,
Bangladesh
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Bangladesh's
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GDP
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 in 2010 was 100
billion
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dollars
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and
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, and
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 it reached
to
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apply
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200
billion
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dollars
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 in the final year. There was
100
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a 100
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billion
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 increase in five years.
Furthermore
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,
Pakistan
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Pakistan's
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GDP
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 in 2010 was around 190
billion
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dollars
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,
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however
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it increased significantly to 210
billion
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dollars
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 in 2011. After that, it stayed constant over few years and surged
upto
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up to
 250
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015.
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,
Malaysia
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Malaysia's
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GDP
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 in
first
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the first
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 year was approximately 250
billion
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dollars
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 and climbed to 300
billion
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dollars
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 after 1 year. After continuously increasing
it
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, it
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 reached
to
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350
billion
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dollars
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 in 2014. After reaching there,
faced
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it faced
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 a decline and
step
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stepped
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 down
at
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to
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 300
billion
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dollars
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product
  • economic performance
  • growth rate
  • stagnation
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • economic boom
  • recession
  • industrial sectors
  • projection
  • fiscal policy
  • economic indicator
  • per capita income
  • purchasing power parity
  • upward trend
  • downturn
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