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The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.

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The line graph contrasts the GDPs of four Asian countries from 2010 through 2015, measured in billions of US
dollars
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.
Overall
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, three of the four
countires
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countries
 demonstrated significant growth throughout the
period
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, with
Malaysia
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 remaining the dominant economy.
Notably
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however
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,
Malaysia
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 uniquely peaked in 2014 before declining,
while
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 Nepal's
GDP
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 remained negligibly low during the same
period
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. Even though Pakistan's growth was broadly consistent through the five years,
Malaysia
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's economy kept its dominance. The two started the
period
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 with a notable difference:
while
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 Pakistan's
GDP
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 stood at around 185
billion
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dollars
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,
Malaysia
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's was about 255
billion
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 the same year. They
also
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 followed broadly similar trajectories of growth until 2014, when
Malaysia
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's
GDP
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 peaked at approximately 340
billion
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 US
dollars
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. In the following year,
however
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,
while
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 Pakistan's
GDP
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 continued rising,
Malaysia
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's declined noticeably, reaching its low of 300
billion
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. Turning to Bangladesh and Nepal, there was a striking difference between them. Nepal's economy had started the
period
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 as the lowest, at around 15
billion
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dollars
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,
while
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 that of Bangladesh's was
rougly
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roughly
 100
billion
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 higher. During the five-year
period
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, the latter kept increasing and eventually peaked at almost 200
billion
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dollars
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.
By contrast
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, Nepal's
GDP
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 remained largely stagnant throughout the
period
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.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, period, malaysia, gdp, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product
  • economic performance
  • growth rate
  • stagnation
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • economic boom
  • recession
  • industrial sectors
  • projection
  • fiscal policy
  • economic indicator
  • per capita income
  • purchasing power parity
  • upward trend
  • downturn
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