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The bar chart below give information about five countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on five different shopping categories by
Belgium
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,
Spain
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, Australia, and
Britain
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 in 2012.
It is clear that
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Britain
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 accounted for the largest
amount
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 of
money
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 in all categories,
while
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Belgium
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 recorded the least
amount
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 of
money
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 in shopping.
In addition
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, the camera was the most
preferable
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preferred
 shopping
category
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 among all sectors. In terms of spending, a significant
amount
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 of
money
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 was spent
in
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on
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 console games
by
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in
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Britain
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, at more than 155
pounds
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.
This
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 figure for
Belgium
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,
Spain
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, and
Austria
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 was under 150
pounds
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.
Moreover
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, consumers of
Britain
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 show
their
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a
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 similar interest in outdoor game accessories at 156
pounds
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,
whereas
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 people of
Austria
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 spent
their
Correct determiner usage
the
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 least
amount
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 of
money
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 on
this
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category
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.
Similarly
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,
this
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 was followed by the cosmetics
category
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. For the remaining sectors, around 170
pounds
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 of
money
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 was spent on cameras by
Britain
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,
whereas
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 only 145
pounds
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spent
Verb problem
was spent
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 on
this
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category
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 by
Belgium
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.
In addition
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,
Spain
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 and
Austria
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 spent
their
Correct determiner usage
a
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 similar
amount
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 of
money
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 on toys at 157
pounds
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,
while
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on
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in
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 the books
category
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,
Austria
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was higher
Verb problem
spent more
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 than
Spain
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 at approximately 157
pounds
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 and 154
pounds
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respectively
Punctuation problem
, respectively
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, belgium, spain, britain, category, pounds, austria with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend
  • spending
  • on consumer goods
  • countries
  • year
  • 2012
  • highest
  • lowest
  • largest
  • smallest
  • difference
  • gap
  • range
  • between
  • among
  • more than
  • less than
  • than
  • in comparison
  • compared with
  • the chart shows
  • the chart compares
  • value
  • figure
  • percent
  • percentage
  • every
  • each
  • other
  • three
  • middle
  • two
  • first
  • second
  • third
  • overall
  • in general
  • close to
  • roughly
  • approximately
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