IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people believe that studying at university is the best route to a successful career, while others think that work experience is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
Some say that the essential method to have a successful job
to
Verb problem
is to
show examples
 study at college,
while
Linking Words
 others argue that
experince
Correct your spelling
experience
 is more critical in every
fields
Fix the agreement mistake
field
show examples
.
This
Linking Words
 essay will discuss that
although
Linking Words
 career
experince
Correct your spelling
experience
 is vital to
get a
Verb problem
gain
show examples
 practical information, studying at university will provide
Higher
Correct article usage
a higher
show examples
 level of knowledge and understanding. In my opinion, I agree that studying in proffessional term
such
Linking Words
 as college and university is much more vital
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 than being
expert
Correct article usage
an expert
show examples
 in
specific
Correct article usage
a specific
show examples
 job. Learning and getting the right way of education is more crucial because a wide range of materials,which will teach us
diverse
Correct article usage
a diverse
show examples
 selection of subjects and topics to be ready for
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
work in the future and to choose the
sutiable
Correct your spelling
suitable
 path for you after graduation.
In addition
Linking Words
, at the
university
Add a comma
university,
show examples
 the main aim
to
Verb problem
is to
show examples
 provide
correct
Correct article usage
a correct
show examples
 approach for learning that will lead to
higher
Correct article usage
a higher
show examples
 level of career in
long
Correct article usage
the long
show examples
 run, with
wide
Correct article usage
a wide
show examples
 variety of skills for different
kind
Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
show examples
 of things,
for example
Linking Words
 lectures with practice and
engeging
Correct your spelling
engaging
 with the teacher in
classroom
Correct article usage
the classroom
show examples
 will provide
good
Correct article usage
a good
show examples
understand
Replace the word
understanding
. In the other hand, more experince you have the more important to know every day something new, practical side of every work is very speciall to know the tasks and your role well, a lot of things and skills you will never know without being in the real situation, exposure to the reality will lead to discover new techinques and to be more familer with it,
also
Linking Words
 the more years you have you will get a benefit like more salary and higher position.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Write a clear end part. Your essay has an intro and body, but no real conclusion with your final view.
task response
Answer both sides in a more balanced way. You talk more about study than work.
task response
Give one or two clear examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body part about one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like First, Also, On the other hand, In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some ideas are long and hard to follow.
task response
You give your opinion clearly in the intro.
task response
You discuss both study and work experience.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has paragraph breaks, which helps the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: