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The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

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The line graph compares
the
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China's population from 1960 and predicted data up
untill
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until
 2050, by
the
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age
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group
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.
Overall
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, across all
age
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 groups exhibit minor to
dramatical
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dramatic
 fluctuations,
while
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below
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those below
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age
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the age
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 of fourteen and
age
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 greater than
sixtyfive
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sixty-five
 showed
a
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an
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 upward
trend
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 and
expected
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are expected
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 to continue on that
trend
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 throughout the time period.
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, the population between the
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age
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ages
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 of fifteen and
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sixtyfour
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sixty-four
 recorded
downward
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a downward
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trend
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 and
forcasted
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forecasted
 to follow
the
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a
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 similar
trend
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.
In
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 the beginning of the timeline, the
propotion
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proportion
 of
population
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the population
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 in the ages below
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sixtyfour
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sixty-four
,
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 stood at around 40% and
above
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the proportion of the population above
show examples
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age
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the age
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 of
sixtyfive
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sixty-five
 reached a relatively low
precentage
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percentage
, at around 6%.
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, the figures are expected to
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decline
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 for the
age
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group
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 below
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sixtyfour upuntill
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sixty-four until
 2050.
However
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, the other
age
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group
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forcasted
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forecasted
 to show
steady
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a steady
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 increase. In 2020, the below fourteen
age
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group
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 peaked at around 70% before expected to show a gradual decline to around 53% in 2050.
In addition
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 to that
after
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, after
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 reaching around 10% ,
above
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the above
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sixtyfour
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sixty-four
age
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group
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expected
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is expected
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 to display a
dramatical
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dramatic
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 surge to around 20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, trend, sixtyfour with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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