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online shopping will be the closing reason of all shops in cities and towns, do you agree or disagree

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for
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 some
,
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customers who purchase
range
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a range
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 of items from shopping malls are more addicted to get thing face-to-face
itself
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.
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however
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, others who buys thing online are
opposite
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the opposite
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 of them.As
i
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 see it, online shopping would never be closed
even
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, even
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according to
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 the
reaserchers
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researchers
 themselves, the reason online shopping is world-wided activity that individuals do on a daily basis.
one
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 one hand, available products in malls will be sold
withing
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within
 a month
but
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, but
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 online shop plays another
silly
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way to sell
product
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products
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 much more
rapid
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 than basic
shops
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.
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in
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addition
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addition,
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 people who are disabled to buy things they wish to,so they have a chance for shopping online.eventually,
reason
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the reason
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of
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 closing online shopping fades away.
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on
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 the other hand,recommendations of shop ads can appeal
vast
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to the vast
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 majority of
the
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people in the
strees
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streets
 or malls,etc, you can see them anywhere you go and whenever you are doing. Brands like ZARA, GUCCI, VALENTINO,etc have been
sold
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selling
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 their products
with
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at a
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 high cost to customers
as
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with hight quality of product.
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, they earn
high
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a high
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 income
either
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with quality and flexibility compared to online.Across the
town
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town,
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 people flow to
shops
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especially
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, especially
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 women
buy
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who buy
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parfiums
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perfumes
,clothes,jewelery and other
in
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items in
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shops
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, they
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. They
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 rarely buy
it
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them
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 online
but
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, but
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 once in a blue
moon
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moon,
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 the reason is
because
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that
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 they do not truth teh product
itself
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itself,
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 whether it is
good looking
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good-looking
 or not.
by constract
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By contrast
,
i
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I
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 disagree with the idea of disappearing online shopping aspects of
shops
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.Even though
shops
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 are common in the same
way
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way,
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 online shopping would
stable
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stabilise
 the same without any agreement of vanishing it

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task response
Make your main idea clear at the start. Say if you agree or disagree in a simple way.
task response
Answer the question more directly. Focus on if online shopping will close shops in towns and cities.
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Add one or two clear examples to support each main point.
coherence cohesion
Use topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, but, so, and in conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Keep one idea in one sentence. Some sentences are too long and hard to follow.
task response
You gave your opinion and kept it through the essay.
coherence cohesion
You used a clear paragraph style with introduction, body, and end.
task response
You tried to compare online shopping and shops in a balanced way.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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