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Band 3

It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural areas, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Compared to the past, nowadays it is more accessible to visit remote natural
places
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 because of technological advancement and development of
transportion
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transportation
. I believe there are more benefits than drawbacks to reach
that
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those
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 kinds of
places
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,
becasue
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because
 of economic efficiency and
academical
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academic
 expansion.
To begin
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 with, Possibility to reach to the remote natural destinations could lead to
development
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the development
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 of tourism industries. Many tourists
interested
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are interested
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 in adventurous tourist spots.
Amazon
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 jungle tour,
for instance
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, is one of the bucket lists for them. When many people visit the
places
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, they need
accomodation
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accommodation
 and transportation to
accomodate with
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.
Hence
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, lots of travel budget could be invested in the local
infrasturcture
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infrastructure
,
such
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 as public transportation or
local
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the local
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 market. It could give advantages for tourism industries
as well as
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local
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the local
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 economy.
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, scientists who visit the place can play
important
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an important
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 role
to research
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in researching
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 the
places
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 and
find
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finding
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 new materials there.
Although
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 lots of
antropologic
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anthropological
 and scientific information
still
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is still
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 preserved in arctic areas, difficulties
to access
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in accessing
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 made it hard for researchers to investigate the
places
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.
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,
Dna
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DNA
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 of mammoths in the glaciers include a large amount of our
revolutional
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revolutionary
 secrets.
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, new natural resources can be found in the areas where still not fully researched. In conclusion,
possibility
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the possibility
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 of travel remote
places
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 these days can cause
positive
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a positive
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 transformation there. There are
Not
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not
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 only economic advantages, but
also
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academical
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academic
 benefits.

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task response
Answer both sides more clearly. You say the good side is stronger, but you do not explain the bad side enough.
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Add one clear bad point, like harm to nature or waste, and show why the good side is still stronger.
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Make your ideas more exact. Some points are too general, so the reader wants more detail.
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Use simple and clear examples. Your examples are interesting, but some are not fully clear or exact.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end, which is good.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences feel separate, not well joined.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph flow. Put one main idea in each body paragraph and support it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Use words like 'however', 'because', 'for example', and 'therefore' in a careful way.
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You give a clear opinion in the first paragraph.
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You talk about two good sides: money and science.
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You include examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to follow most of the time.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientists
  • tourists
  • remote
  • natural
  • areas
  • South Pole
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • development
  • travel
  • study
  • environment
  • climate
  • change
  • research
  • discoveries
  • protect
  • wildlife
  • ecosystems
  • economies
  • jobs
  • businesses
  • presence
  • harm
  • disturb
  • pollution
  • stress
  • overcrowding
  • landscape
  • facilities
  • findings
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