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Individuals, not governments, should be responsible for environmental protection. Discuss both views.

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Environmental protection is an important issue in today’s world, and people have different opinions about who should be responsible for it. Some believe that
individuals
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 should take responsibility,
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 others think
governments
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 should play the main role. Both views have valid points. On the one hand,
individuals
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 have an important role in protecting the environment. Every person’s daily habits can affect nature.
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, people can reduce waste by recycling, saving water, and using less plastic. If
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 become more responsible, the
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 level of pollution can decrease.
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, personal choices
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 as using public transport
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 of cars can
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 help reduce air pollution.
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,
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 have more power and resources to solve environmental problems. They can create laws and regulations to control pollution from factories and companies.
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,
governments
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 can limit harmful emissions or introduce fines for environmental damage. Without government control, many industries may ignore environmental protection because it can be expensive. In conclusion, both
individuals
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 and
governments
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 should be responsible for environmental protection.
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individuals
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 can improve their daily habits,
governments
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 are necessary to create rules and ensure that environmental laws are followed.

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Give a little more detail for each side. This will make your answer more full.
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Add one clear example for the government side and one for the people side.
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Say your own view more clearly in the end or in the intro.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like also, for example, and however to make ideas flow better.
coherence cohesion
Make each main point a bit more developed with one extra reason.
coherence cohesion
You can make the second body paragraph connect more directly to the first with a clearer contrast.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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Your ideas stay on the topic all the time.
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Both sides of the question are discussed.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion matches the main discussion well.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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