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Band 6.5

The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph depicts the weekly
number
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 of fast food
consumption
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 in the UK between 1970 and 1990.
Overall
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, it shows that the
amount
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proportion
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 of
portion
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people
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 who consumed pizza
are
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apply
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decreased over the years until 1990 from 1970 ,
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however
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however,
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 the rest of the food
are
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is
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 increased rapidly. At the
beggining
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beginning
 of 1970, there
are
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were
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 already 300 grams of pizza
consumption
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and
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, and
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 it
is fall
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fell
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 gradually to 210 in 1980, and
then
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 it remained unchanged for the next two years
as
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at
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 the
level
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same level
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in
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as in
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 1980. On
other
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the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the
number
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 of
consumption
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 for
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fish & chips grew
gradualy
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gradually
 in the first three years to 120 and 98,
while
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 the
number
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 of fish and chips
consumption
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 increased sharply to 300 grams in 1985, the
number
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 of hamburger
consumption
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 only had a small climb to 101 grams in the same year.
Then
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 for the rest of
year
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the year
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, it is projected that both of the
foods
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food
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consumption
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 will be increasing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fast food
  • UK
  • 1970
  • 1990
  • increase
  • stable
  • hover
  • peak
  • popularity
  • double
  • comparison
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