Some people think that it is the responsibility of the government to solve environmental problems. Others believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take action. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

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is a significant debate regarding
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solving environmental problems.
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it is argued by some that authorities should be required to solve environmental issues, others believe that people should bear responsibility to cope with these challenges.
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completely agree with
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view because it helps to
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public awareness.

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Write a full answer. Now you have only an introduction, so your idea is not fully shown.
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Say your main view more clearly. You agree with the first side, but your reason is very short.
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Add one or two clear examples to support your idea about government action.
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Use a full essay plan: introduction, body paragraph 1, body paragraph 2, and conclusion.
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Link ideas with simple words like because, also, however, and therefore.
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Develop each main point. One short sentence is not enough for a strong band.
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You clearly show that there are two sides to this topic.
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You give your own opinion, which is important in this task.
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Your writing has the start of an introduction.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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