The diagram below shows the process of producing yogurt in a factory. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram demonstrates how a
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yogurt
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is produced on an industrial scale. Generally speaking, the
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yogurt
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production is a linear process that consists of heating and cooling, adding live bacteria, mixing with additional ingredients, packaging, and delivering to the customer. The manufacturing
begin
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with heating the
milk
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in a pot at 90 degree celcius for 30 minutes, measuring it with
thermometer
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a thermometer
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stick. Once it
heated
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is heated
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, the next stage is
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to cool
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down the
milk
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until reach 44 degree celcius. In the same chamber, a sachet of live bacteria is
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added
into
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the
milk
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. After that, the mixture
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to cool down in proper room temperature (100oF). After it
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down,
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comes
to
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storage procedure, which
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involves putting it
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into a refrigerator to maintain
it
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consistency. After frozen
milk
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settled, the additional ingredients, including sugar and
strowbery
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strawberry
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is
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then
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poured into the mixture, in order to obtain
fresh
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a fresh
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and sweet flavour of the
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yogurt
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. Eventually, the
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yogurt
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is packaged into small glasses
,
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apply
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before
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then delivering
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being delivered
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to the customer via truck delivery.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words yogurt, milk with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pasteurization
  • fermentation
  • bacterial cultures
  • incubation
  • optimal temperature
  • thickens
  • distinctive texture
  • cooled
  • additional ingredients
  • packaged
  • sealed
  • distribution
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