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In the future, nobody will buy printed books or newspapers because people will buy and read everything online without paying. to what extent do you agree?

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 of reading from
books
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 and newspapers is fading away in
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a few
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 decades, because of
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the significant
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 development of
e-reades
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e-readers
, tablets and digital content, which is more convenient and affordable. I strongly believe that online material will
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 printed
books
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 and
newspaper
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newspapers
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 with advanced technology.
This
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 essay will examine both
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perspectives
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 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraphs. On the one hand, the older generation mostly prefer hard copies to read news and content because they
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face
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 complications
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in using
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 advanced technology, so they choose to read printed material. They
donot
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do not
 want to
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struggle with online apps.
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, e-readers are more expensive, some
people
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 are not able to afford
electronic
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an electronic
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 gadget,
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, they purchase
second hand
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second-hand
books
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 and newspapers to read.
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, students who belongs from privilage family the often buy
books
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 from other senior students, which contributes to
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.
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, pupils can complete their study except spending more money on
books
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.
On the other hand
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, Digital
books
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 and newspapers are more sustainable, reducing the need for paper and thereby contributing to environmental conservation. To clarify, paper made from wood so it reducing trees count, and after using
people
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 burn paper which ink used for writing
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 very harmful that's why it effects on environment.
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, online material is more convenient and accessible
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as well as
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and
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 it is portable.
People
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 can get knowledge in depth just in a single search.
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, they can understand the material with the help of various images because on
internet
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the internet
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 there are wide range of pictures related to a single topic.
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,
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 printed material is more
afordable
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affordable
 and easy to read for older
, digital
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people, digital
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 content has more adventageous,
people
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 can search
material
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for material
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of
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from
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 different
authers
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authors
 and
opt that which one
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choose the one that
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 is easy to understand and take help from images
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. They
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 can carry
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a
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 smartphone when they go outside.

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Answer the question more directly. You say you strongly agree, but you also spend much time on why some people still like paper.
coherence and cohesion
Give a clearer main idea in each body part. Start each part with one simple point, then explain it.
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Use examples that fit the topic better. The part about buying old school books is not a strong example for the future of books and news.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, however, because, so, and as a result.
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Explain your support more. Some ideas are good, but they need one more sentence to show why they matter.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same line of thought in one paragraph. Do not move from cost to age to study too fast.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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You answer the topic and give your opinion.
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You include some reasons like cost, ease, and the environment.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-readers
  • Digital content
  • Environmental conservation
  • Tech-savvy
  • Convenience
  • Multimedia
  • Interactive experience
  • Decline in sales
  • Readership
  • Sustainability
  • Production and distribution costs
  • Consumer preferences
  • Engaging
  • Printed versions
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