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Band 5.5

You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - ask for some time off to complete a qualification. - Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. - Say how the qualification helps your job or company.

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Dear Mr John, I am writing
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 letter to inquire about some days off to complete my crucial qualification. I would like to take one week off, from May 7 2026, to May 14 2026. During the period, it is helpful to concentrate on studying. Once I am back to work, I will extend my working hours to catch up
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 demand of the production, and enquire about the handover note from
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 who covered my shift during the break, in case something unexpected happens. The qualification is about the machinery which is essential to my duty, CNC, in the company.
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 not only enhances my personal technique but
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 helps the company to gain more customers
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 who require the qualified production. Thanks for your time and understanding. I am looking forward to your response at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely, Aiden Kan

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but add a little more detail about why you need one week.
task response
Task response: Your tone is polite and clear, but a few lines sound a bit formal or not natural.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear order with a good start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some linking is not smooth. Use simple link words like also, so, and after that.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: A few sentences are long and hard to follow. Make them shorter and clearer.
task response
Task response: You ask for time off, say what you will do later, and explain how the course helps your work.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so the letter is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use a proper greeting and closing for a work letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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