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More and more plastics are polluting in world cities, countryside and oceans. What are the problems caused by plastic wastes? What measures should be taken to solve it?

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Nature
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need
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 by people .
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pollution
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 is one of the most serious
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country
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countries
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this
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 trend
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 human health and animal extinction
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 a fine and
provide
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 adequate education
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pollution
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become
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environment
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the environment
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life
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 . Plastics
is non - biodegradable
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, meaning they can remain in
nature
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 for
hundred
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 of years.
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result
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 they accumulate in landfills and natural habitats , polluting soil and
drink
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 water . It
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 to damage
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nature
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 and
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people
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people's health,
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illness
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nature
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 can influence
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 of animals, especially those which live in the oceans. They often mistake plastic for food , which can lead to injury and even death. When it comes to animal which is live
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 land are affected by ingestion and entanglement. To address these problems , several measures should be implemented. First of all ,
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place
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crowded.
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this
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human
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humans
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 pay extra money just a waste
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 careful .
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 level of
pollution
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 will decrease .
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 waste of effect and how
throw
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 away
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 waste . Schools and
another education centre
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other educational centres
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prove
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convey
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 the most important message in early age
of child
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apply
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 pure air and clear
nature
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is
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life
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people
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people's lives
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life
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 is likely short . In conclusion,
pollution
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became
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has become
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several problem which is impact on inner health and loss of biodiversity, and possible ways which can solve it
is
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 education and
to charge
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Answer both parts more fully. You talk about problems and ways, but some ideas are too short.
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Use clearer main ideas in each body part. Start each part with one clear point, then explain it.
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Add more clear and real examples. This will make your ideas stronger and easier to trust.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic order: intro, body, body, end. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences do not link well. Use simple link words well, like first, also, as a result, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in one sentence when you can. Some sentences are too long and hard to follow.
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You answer both questions in the task.
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You give real problems like harm to people and animals.
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You give two ways to help: fines and education.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphs for different parts of the essay.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marine life
  • terrestrial animals
  • ingest
  • leach
  • endocrine disruption
  • reproductive problems
  • economic costs
  • aesthetic concerns
  • accumulation
  • landscapes
  • legislation
  • policy measures
  • single-use plastics
  • incentivize
  • environmentally-friendly alternatives
  • public awareness campaigns
  • responsible consumer behavior
  • recycling rates
  • corporate responsibility
  • sustainable packaging solutions
  • plastic footprints
  • waste management systems
  • recycling infrastructure
  • waste collection systems
  • disposed of
  • recycled
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