You recently ordered an item online, but there is a problem with it. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: Describe the item you ordered Explain the problem Say what you would like the company to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my concern regarding the malfunctioning of a Ninja
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recently purchased from your store. I bought the appliance two weeks ago during the Black Friday sale for $195.
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is black and features a temperature range of up to 390 degrees Celsius. Unfortunately, the unit has developed a fault; it frequently stops working before the timer has finished, leaving food uncooked.
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has caused significant inconvenience and has resulted in a great deal of wasted time. Since the item is still within the return period, I would like to request either an exchange for a new unit or a full refund. I would appreciate it if
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could be resolved by next week to
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disruption to my cooking routine. I look forward to hearing from you promptly. Yours faithfully, Gurjeet Kaur

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Task response: You answered all parts well. To get a very high score, add one more small detail about the order, like the order number or date.
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Task response: Your tone is polite and right for a company. You can make the request a little more clear by choosing one action first, like a refund or a new item.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow and ideas are in a clear order. To make it even better, you can add a link word like 'As a result' before the effect of the problem.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Most paragraphs have one main idea. The second paragraph is good, but you could keep only item details there and move all problem effects to the next paragraph.
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Task response: You clearly described the item, the problem, and what you want the company to do.
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Task response: The tone is formal and polite from start to end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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Coherence and cohesion: Your closing is correct and fits the formal letter style.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • order number
  • shipment
  • delivery
  • damaged
  • defective
  • package
  • request
  • replacement
  • refund
  • customer support
  • awaiting your prompt response
  • solution
  • photos attached
  • upon inspection
  • apologies in advance
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