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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

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the
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The
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 line graph below illustrates the pattern of
number
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the number
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 of shops has been shut down or newly opened between 2011 and 2018 in a country. Both
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trends
shows
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show
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 the decline in
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 time period
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 closures of shop has avalanche fall in 2015
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similarly
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,
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openings have
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 the same pattern in 2012, but
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overall
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overall,
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 both
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show
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 fluctuations.
in
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In
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 2011,
New Inaugrated
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new inaugurated
 stores
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were
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 around 8,500 with
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fluctuating
 decline till 2018
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. This
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this
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 shows 3,000 new startings, after
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2012,
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 constant growth
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was observed
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till
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for
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 two years
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, with
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 peaks in 2014 of around 6,000
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. Then,
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then
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 from 2015 to
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2017,
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 it
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was
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 almost steady at about 4,000
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finally
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little dip takes
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, a little dip took
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 it to 3,000 in 2018.
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,
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shutting
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 down shows that in 2011, 6,500 shops
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were closed, and
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 in
2018
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2018,
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 it goes upto just above 5,000
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. This
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 has the jaw dropping stats
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. In
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2015
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2015,
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 closures
reach
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reached
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 below
to
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1,000 from 6,500 in just one year
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,
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then
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 again rose to 5,000
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then
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, and then
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 till
2018
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2018,
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 their is no major changes seen.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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