Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the history for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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whether history is not
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I totally
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experience about vast cultural values. On the one side,
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of
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everything is easily accessible for students.They
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important to remember the date of past events
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, they prefer to invest their time
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learning new skills
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as computer programming, software developement
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students to
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specific dates
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their holistic
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, others and I assert that history plays an indispensable role in order to provide umpteen information about various historical event either
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books or museums. It not only broadens our
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gives us a clear picture
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various cultural events in the past centuries. To cite an example,
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Indus Valley
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demonstrates
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the urban planning of houses in the past years
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various
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found during excavation
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us to widen more data about
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inhabitants
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I firmly believe that history is the best source of imparting vital information about different historical events.

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Answer both sides in a more equal way. Write one clear idea for each side, then explain it well.
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Give your opinion in a very direct way in the introduction and keep it clear in the whole essay.
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Use examples with more detail. Show how the example supports your main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make topic sentences simple and clear so each paragraph has one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Do not use too many linking words like although, however, therefore in one sentence. This can make the sentence hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph flow. Some ideas jump too fast, so add short clear support after each main idea.
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You answered both views and gave your opinion.
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You used a relevant example about the Indus Valley Civilization.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to see in most parts.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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