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Band 5

You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to inform you about the
university
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 ID
card
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 that I
had
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lost recently. I am Sam, a
second year
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second-year
 student of business management at your
university
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.
Last
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 Monday, I used my
card
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 to enter
into
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the
university
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,
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 afterwards, I took the subway home. When I reached home
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then
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 I realised
,
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 that the
card
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 was missing. I believe I may
lost
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 it during the commute. On the day of my final examination, guards did not allow me to enter the
university
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 without my identification
card
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.
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, I missed my final exam.
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, I regularly use my
id
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 to sign in
the
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 library, borrowing books and use it at the food courts
while
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 making payments. I kindly request
you
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to
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look into
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 matter. I would really appreciate
if
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 you could issue me a new
id
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card
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, and give me
a
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permission to appear in the missed final examination. Your help would
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 a lot to me. I am looking forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Sam

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but add a bit more detail about how the lost card affects your study and daily life.
task response
Task response: Your tone is polite, but some lines are not fully formal. Use 'I lost my student card' not 'the card that I had lost recently'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear order: problem, effects, and request. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some linking words can be better. For example, use 'After that' or 'As a result' to join ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph and check small grammar errors, because they can make the flow less clear.
task response
You clearly say that you lost your card and when it happened.
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You explain real problems, like not entering the university, missing the exam, using the library, and paying for food.
coherence and cohesion
Your opening and closing are suitable for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphs are easy to follow and mostly stay on one main idea.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • student identification card
  • student services
  • lost card
  • campus
  • library access
  • school building
  • borrow books
  • pay for food
  • daily classes
  • as soon as possible
  • replace my card
  • necessary steps
  • small fee
  • complete the process
  • I would be grateful
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