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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

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The Map shows the
canterbury
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Canterbury
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area
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Punctuation problem
, on
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on which
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where
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 planning for
new
Correct article usage
a new
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 school is going on, yet two location has been discussed for
this
Linking Words
.
Overall
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, S2 School is to plan on the Main roads which
have
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are
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 good for accessibility of transport, S1 is
on
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in
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 the
country
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countryside
side
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area
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 which has
lot
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a lot
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 of greenery near
to
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apply
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it. For S2 loaction it is in the
mid
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middle
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 of the place
which
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, which
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 is inside the Town centre
with
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, with
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No
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a no
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 traffic zone surrounded by
Housing
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a housing
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area
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 means no noise disturbance for the students
,
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. Also,
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also
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 it is easily approachable for Chartham and Sturry town population
with
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, with
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 Connectivity of Main roads and catering
of
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to
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 around 11,500 persons
,
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.
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In addition
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,
University
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the university
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 is
on the
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apply
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just north
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side
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apply
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of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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this
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palnned
Correct your spelling
planned
 location. for S1 Location, which is on the east
side
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 of the locality it is in the counrt
side
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area
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 which is completely outside of the housing
area
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 and it is more convinent for the Sturry people's with just 5km travel, university is on the north west
side
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 from here, it is in Southern part of the Main roads heading towards Sturry with population of 7,000 and it is very far from Chartham city which has population of 4,500.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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