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Human activity has had a negavtive impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change.

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Introduction
There are
contasting
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contrasting
 opinions regarding
weather
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whether
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 the damage people have done to plants and animals can be
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salvaged
 or not. For the most
part
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part,
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 I think the
effect
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effects
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 we caused are so
terminting
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terminal
 that it would be almost
imposible
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impossible
 to reverse
tehm
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them
.
However
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, if people change some habits,
as well as
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 scientists work on reproducing them, we might see some important
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differences
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.
Body · 1
On one hand, there are countless species of
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apply
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organisms that have gone extinct and are in that process, all because of our doing.
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 has been a result of our way of living and habits whicho people have grown heavily
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accustomed
 to
making
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, making
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 it complicated for
myself
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me
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 to entertain the idea of humans
rearanging
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rearranging
 their
lyfestyle
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lifestyle
 in order to save them. By
this
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, I mean to explore how challenging it would be for a large part of the
popullation
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population
 to
simultaniusly
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simultaneously
 agree on implementing similar changes.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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, in
the
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recent
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last
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 years there have been huge advances
on
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in
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 artificial reproduction to save plants and animals. Considering they are esential factor in the world working, and in human
living
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living,
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such
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 a comfortable life as we
are
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have
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, we should
absolutley
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absolutely
 make the
changeand
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change and
 do our part.
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, I think we should work on the visibility of
this
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 issue, making it more urgent, so we
start
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can start
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 improving soon.
Conclusion
In conclusion,

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. Say more clearly why change is hard and what actions can help.
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Finish the conclusion. Your essay stops before the final idea, so the response feels incomplete.
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Use one or two clear examples to support your points, such as forest loss or animal breeding plans.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph follow one main idea only. This will make your message easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully, such as on the one hand, on the other hand, as a result, and therefore.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence flow. Some sentences are too long and hard to follow, so split them into shorter parts.
task response
You answer both views and you give your own opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear paragraph plan with an introduction and two body parts.
coherence and cohesion
The main ideas are mostly easy to see.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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