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Band 1

Human activity has had a negavtive impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change.

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Human
actions
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 have a negative
imalt
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impact
 on worldwide plants and animals. On the one hand, maybe consequences are too late for
solveing
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solving
.
On the other hand
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, good
actions
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 can make
the
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a
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 difference.
A long
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Over
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 the years, humans
were
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have been
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 doing a lot of bad
actions
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 and think
in
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that
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 a
no pollution world can be
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world with no pollution is
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 impossible. In consequence,
animals
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animals'
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 habitat has been affected because of human
imprudences
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imprudence
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. Cases
as
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such as
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 the fires in the Patagonia that
had a
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put in danger animals and
trees spcies
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tree species
, turning on fire kilometres of forest. Plastic trash
had cause
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has caused
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 the
deam
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death
 of a lot of ocean
lifes
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life
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.
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This
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These
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 problems generate
irrebersible
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irreparable
 changes.
Although
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,
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apply
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humas
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humans
 have good
actions
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,
industrys
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industries
 have to
a
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make a
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lot of changes
doing
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to do
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 better
to
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for
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 the
enviroment
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environment
.

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. Say why some people think change is not possible, and why others think it is possible.
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Add a clear opinion in the introduction and conclusion. This helps the reader know your main idea.
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Develop each main point with one clear reason and one simple example.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphing. Write one paragraph for each side, then a short conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, for example, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence connect to the one before it. Some ideas now feel too short or sudden.
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You answered the main topic and talked about both views.
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You gave examples about fire and plastic in the sea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic order: introduction, body ideas, and ending line.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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