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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think this cannot be changed, while others belive actions can be taken to bring about a change.

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Human activity has had many negative effects on plants and animals around the world. Some
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 believe that
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 situation cannot be changed,
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 others think that actions can still be taken to improve it. On the one hand, some
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 believe that there is no point in trying to repair the damage humans have caused to the planet. They argue that by the time society became aware of environmental problems, it was already too late to reverse them.
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, they think that the world will never return to the way it was a century ago because many species have already disappeared and pollution has increased significantly.
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, many
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 believe that small personal actions can still make a difference.
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, recycling, reducing plastic consumption, and participating in environmental activities can help improve the condition of the planet. They believe that if more
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 change their habits, the negative impact on the environment could be reduced in the future. In conclusion,
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 it is impossible to completely reverse the damage already done to the planet, I believe that
people
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 can still take actions to improve the environment and reduce pollution.

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Give one more clear idea in each main part.
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Use a more direct answer to both views early in the essay.
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Add one more real and clear example to support your point.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like because, so, and however.
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Make each main part start with one clear topic sentence.
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Explain each point a little more before moving to the next idea.
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You answered both sides of the topic.
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Your main ideas are clear and easy to follow.
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The essay has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
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Your paragraphs are in a good order.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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