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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others belive actions can be taken to bring about a change.

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Human
actions
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 are hurting the planet, plants and animals on
Earth
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. One part of the population believes that those
actions
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 will
last
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 forever, and the other half of the population
think
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 that those
type
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types
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 of
actions
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 could
change
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 in a positive way.
a
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 lot of
people
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 think that the negative impact on plants and animals cannot be changed because of lazy
people
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. They don’t see the negative damage they are doing by throwing plastic
to
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on
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 the floor, like they do not see the permanent damage if they do not do something about it.
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, my teacher has a lazy aunt,
she
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 does not recycle. The other half of the world thinks that humans can
change
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 just to save the
Earth
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.
Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 there is a lot of machinery and
instrumentary
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instrumentation
 that the only purpose they have is to clean the
Earth
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 and save it from pollution.
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, there are businesses specialized on pollution and studying how to eliminate it from the world. Real work is SRL, a business specialized on pollution
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for
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 example.
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, in my
opinion
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 it is not that easy to
change
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people
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’s
actions
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. Lazy
people
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, like my teacher’s aunt, will always be lazy
and
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, and
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 she would not
change
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 just to save the
Earth
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. The machinery would have to work indefinitely
cleaning
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, cleaning
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 all the plastic that
people
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 like my teacher’s aunt don’t recycle.

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Answer both sides more fully. Now you show both views, but the first side is much stronger than the second side.
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Add a clear opinion in the introduction, and keep it the same to the end.
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Use better examples. The example about your teacher’s aunt is too small and does not really show a world problem.
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Explain your ideas more. Say how people can change, what actions can help, and why some people think change is not possible.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly with words like first, however, for example, as a result, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Some points are repeated, like the idea of lazy people. Add new support instead of saying the same point again.
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You answer the main topic and talk about both views.
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You give your opinion in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has three clear parts: opening, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas are easy to follow in order.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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