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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken ro bring about a change.

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The activities that humans perform cause a negative impact on animals and plants
blobally
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globally
. A percentage of the population
believe
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believes
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 that
this
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 cannot be changed,
while
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 other people think that certain actions can be taken to generate a change. On the one hand, some people state that
this
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 impact can be changed by reducing the usage of
plastic
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such
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, such
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 as in bottles,
bags
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 and in our daily
lifes
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lives
.
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, by recycling
the
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apply
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plastic
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 thing we have
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us bohiesays
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as
bags
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, it could be essential for reducing the creation of more
plastic
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 things will help to have a better air quality
and
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, and
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 the world would be less polluted.
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 will be helpful for the animals and the plants
as
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 toxic waste will be reduced. The air will be better, the endangered species will be drecreased and
the
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apply
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global warming can
decrease
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be decreased
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 if the industries fabric less
plastic
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.
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, I should consider that our Earth has
a
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apply
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damage that even if we recycle and
reduced
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reduce
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 the usage of bottles,
bags
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 and
plastic
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 in our daily lifescannot be repaired
the
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. Plastic
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plastic
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 things are essential for our
poacticity
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productivity
.
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, if we consider the usage of
biodesparable
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biodegradable
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bags
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bags,
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 there will
be
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also be
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also
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 air pollution as they
also
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 need to be
fabric
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made of fabric
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and
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, and
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also they broke
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they also break down
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 and
last
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 less than the
plastic
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 ones. So pollution will exist as more
bags
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 will be
need
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needed
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 because of their bad quality. In conclusion, I consider that even if we recycle
it
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, it
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 won't help as nowadays there is a lot of pollution and our Earth has a lot of
damagefrom
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damage from
 different things.
foe
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For
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 being realistic, not all people would be in favor to recycle as
its
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it's
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 more
hygenic
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hygienic
 and
easy
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easier
 to buy new
plastic
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 than to use the one we have.

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task response
Task response: Answer both views more clearly. Now you talk more about plastic, but the question is about all human activity and whether change is possible.
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Task response: Make your own opinion very clear from the start and keep it the same in all parts.
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Task response: Add one or two clear examples, such as forest cutting, dirty water, or hunting. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has clear paragraphs, which is good, but some ideas are hard to follow because sentences are too long or not complete.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words well, like first, also, however, for example, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check each sentence to make sure it connects well to the one before it. Some parts jump too fast from one idea to another.
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Task response: You answer both sides of the question and give your own view in the end.
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Task response: You stay on the general topic of harm to plants and animals.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has an introduction, two main body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use some linking words like on the one hand, moreover, and in conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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