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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their houses rather than buy their houses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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For individuals in some countries, seeing lots
benefits
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of benefits
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 of renting
a
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apply
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accommodations rather than purchasing houses
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, which
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 could be a big dream for whose desires. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss why renting can allow for a more
lifestyle
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flexible lifestyle
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, but why it can eventually be financially disadvantageous. The majority of
benefits
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the benefits
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 of not buying a
house
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 is flexibilities. To illustrate, a term of
flexible
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flexibility
 is that allowing people who likely have
lifestyle
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a lifestyle
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 of
work
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working
 between places or
,
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apply
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crowed
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 areas.
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, working in the main cities where
are
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they are
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 busy all day long is in high demands of living where closely to workplace,
renting
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and renting
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 a
house
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 is an option
for
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to
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 support
to
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the
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 financial budget
workers
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.
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,
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apply
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 owning a
house
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 in
a
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 long term is
much
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a much
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 more stable choice
but to do so
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, resulting in people would feel struggle to manage their
saved up
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saved-up
 money
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, which
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,
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 potentially impossible. The biggest pitfall of renting a home
constitutes
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 the financial expenses,
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including
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 transitioning from one to another.
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, decorations
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 living in a
rent
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rented
 apartment
is
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are
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 not possible to bring
it
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them
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 all to fit into the new
house
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, especially if there are restriction rules in the contract
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is
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do
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 not
allowing to move
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 or construct it,
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however
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however,
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 it could be limited.
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, expenses from redesigns or decorations are wasted lot of money.
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, the tenants can’t get away from the
last
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 inspection where the
house
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 has to be checked
on
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 any damages
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 living in the property, if they are reimbursement will not be refunded. In conclusion, I argued that renting provides a greater financial reward. Personally, I prefer to rent so that I can live a more flexible lifestyle.

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Answer both sides more fully. Write more about the good side and the bad side with clear reasons.
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Use ideas that are easy to follow. Some lines are hard to understand, so make each point simple and direct.
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Give one clear example for each main point. Your city example is useful, but it needs clearer detail.
coherence and cohesion
Make one main idea in each body paragraph. Do not mix too many small ideas in one part.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a clear way, like first, for example, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some sentences do not connect well, so the reader may get lost.
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You answer the question about both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion.
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You try to use examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Flexibility
  • Minimal maintenance
  • Upfront costs
  • Equity building
  • Customization
  • Financial instability
  • Renovations
  • Temporary nature
  • Desirable locations
  • Long-term commitment
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