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Writing Samples
Band 4

Solving environmental problems should be the responsibility of international organisations rather than individual national government. Do you agree or disagree.

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Fix capitalization
I
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 agree because it can put a regulation for all
countries
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countries,
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said dont
Wrong verb form
saying don't
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 keep garbage cause pollution and inpact it for health so badly
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. In
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in addition
Linking Words
 to water poisoning ,
national
Correct article usage
the national
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 goverment become not thier first intrest so
solution
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the solution
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 for that
take it
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takes
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 one organisation
is
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, which is
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 best
and
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remain
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remains
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 a true rule for keeping the clear air ,water and food from exposure
the
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to the
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 bad influence

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task response
State your main idea in one clear first sentence. Say if you agree, and why.
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Add one or two simple examples. This will make your ideas stronger.
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Explain each main point more. Now the ideas are short and not fully developed.
coherence and cohesion
Use full stops to break long ideas into short sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like 'first', 'also', 'for example', and 'so'.
coherence and cohesion
Make the order clearer: main idea, reason 1, reason 2, short ending.
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You answer the question and clearly say you agree.
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Your ideas stay on the topic of pollution and health.
coherence and cohesion
There is a basic line of thought from problem to solution.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like 'because' and 'in addition'.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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