The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. #44

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The map depicts the
town
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of Garlsdon
and
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, and
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there will be a new
supermarket
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that
already
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is already
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planned in the
town
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.
Also
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, the map illustrates two possible sites for the
supermarket
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.
Overall
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, the S1 is situated in
countryside
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the countryside
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just outside the
industry
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industrial
area
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near the
railway
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, the
population
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is around 10.000 people.
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,
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apply
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the S2
placed
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is placed
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in
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town
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the town
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centre and
also
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near the
railway
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,
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however
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however,
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this
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area
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had a bigger
population
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than the previous
area
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. It can be seen that the S1 is located in
countryside
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the countryside
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just outside the
industry
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industrial
area
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and there is a
railway
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nearby.
In addition
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,
this
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supermarket
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it
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apply
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is really suited for
worker
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workers
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, because it is near the
industry
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industrial
area
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which
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, which
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is Hindon, that has 10.000
population
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.
Whereas
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,
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apply
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the S2
positioned
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is positioned
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in
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town
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the town
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centre,
this
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supermarket
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is
also
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near the
railway
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and more suited for a bigger
population
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which
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, which
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are
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includes
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Cransdon and Brandson,
that reached 29.000
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reaching 29,000
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and 15.000
population
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, compared to Hindon
than
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, which
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only has 10.000
population
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.
Not to mention
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,
this
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supermarket
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is very
accesible
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accessible
for people who live in the housing
area
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near Cransdon.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, supermarket, area, railway, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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