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The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English house.

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The line
gragh
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graph
 illustrates the demand for
electricty
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electricity
 in
Englend
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England
 during winter and summer
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while
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, while
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 the pie chart demonstrates the proportion
in the usage
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apply
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of
the
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apply
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electricity
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in
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usage in
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 an average English house.
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overall
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Overall
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, in the winter
theres
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there's
 an
increasing
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increase
 in the units of
electricity
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,
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;
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however
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,during summer
British
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, British
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 people
used
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use
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 less
electricity
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,
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. Furthermore
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furthermore
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,the most used
of
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apply
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power
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was
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is
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 for heating rooms and
waters
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water
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. In terms of
electricity
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,demand during summer
British
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, British
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 people
seems
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seem
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 to use no more than 200000 units of
electricity
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Linking Words
on
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; on
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 in
winter
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winter,
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 the usage
increased
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increases
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 to approximately 500000
unit
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units
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 of
elecricity
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electricity
. The highest
used
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use
 of
power
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 was on
heatings room
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heating rooms
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 and water
with
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, with
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 a proportion of 52.5 people in
Englind
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England
 consumed 17.5% of
power
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 on oven,
kittles
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apply
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 and
watching
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washing
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 machines. the lowes used of
power
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 was for
lighning
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lighting
,TV and radio
has
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have
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 the exact same
precentage
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percentage
 for vacuum cleaners,food mixers,electric tools witch is 15.0%

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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