Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring back a change.

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it's been shown that human activity is causing an impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think it cannot be changed because of all the damage already caused
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others believe that we are still on time to stop and make a positive difference. On one hand, some people argue that the damage caused by human activity is already too severe to reverse.
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, species extinction is permanent, and ecosystems that have been destroyed,
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or coral reefs, can take hundreds or even thousands of years to recover. If they recover at all, even if we do all for it, maybe it's not enough.
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makes it seem unrealistic to fully undo the harm already done.
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, others believe that human actions can still make a positive difference. Governments, organisations, and individuals can adopt sustainable practices, protect endangered species, and restore deteriorated ecosystems. Efforts like reforestation, reducing pollution, and creating wildlife reserves show that,
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the effects are serious, it is still possible to improve the situation and prevent
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everything that has been stated so far, I believe that the impact is already made and we cannot change it, so we must live with the world we
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, but if we take conscious of the situation, maybe we will not reverse what we have already
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, but yes, stop it before it gets worse.

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Task response: You answer both sides and give your view. This is good. But your view is a bit mixed at the end. Make it more clear from the start and keep it the same in all parts.
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Task response: Your ideas are on topic, but some parts are too general. Add one more clear example to show how people can help nature.
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Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a clear basic plan with intro, two body parts, and end. This helps the reader.
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Coherence and cohesion: The second body paragraph is too short. Add more explanation so both main parts feel balanced.
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Coherence and cohesion: Some links are good, like 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand'. But you can use more simple link words like 'also', 'because', 'so', and 'for this reason'.
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Coherence and cohesion: In a few places, your ideas stop too fast. After one main point, add one more line to explain why it matters.
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You answer the full question and talk about both views.
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You give a clear example about extinct species and damaged forests or reefs.
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Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
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You use paragraphing well, and this makes the essay easy to read.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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