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Band 3.5

You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work Write a letter to your manager and say What problem do you have What difficulties does this create for you What could be done about it.

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I'
m
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 writing
this
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 letter to make a
complain
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complaint
 about
issue
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an issue
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 with my work
computer
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 that
i'
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I'm
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m
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 suffering, and
i'
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I'm
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m
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 expecting a solution as soon as possible. The
computer
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 is
setup
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set up
 on my
desk
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desk,
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 is currently very old and
its
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it's
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 slower than usual, and
i was
Verb problem
I
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 tried to fix it
with
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by
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 deleting unwanted data to make it faster.
Then
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i
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I
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 found
it
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I
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 couldn't help, and
this
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 situation makes lots of inconveniences on my work
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 even
making
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slows down
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 my productivity
slower
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apply
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. I already informed it to the IT department to fix my
computer
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, but they didn't
gave
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give
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 me a permenant solutions.
Therefore
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, I suggest
to provide
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providing
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 me
a
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with a
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new
computer
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 to
fixed
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fix
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this
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 problem. So,
i'
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I'm
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m
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 looking forward to
have
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having
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 a better solution as per my
suggetion
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suggestion
, and
i
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I
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 kindly request to fix
this
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 problem as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Dinith

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task response
Answer all three parts more fully. Say the problem, how it hurts your work, and what exact help you need.
task response
Use a more polite work tone. For example, say 'I am writing to inform you about a problem with my computer.'
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each part: problem, effect on work, and solution.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like 'because', 'so', 'but', and 'therefore'.
task response
You covered the main problem and asked for a clear solution.
coherence and cohesion
You used a clear letter form with greeting and closing.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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