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Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorway and what solutions are there?

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Although
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 motorways enable people to travel quickly and efficiently over long distances, they
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 give rise to a
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 essay will discuss the problems of
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, including
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 solutions.
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, accidents were the most common type of
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 motorways. Most of the
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 usually complainted with the speed limit, but some of them
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 drive beyond the speed limit.
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 behaviour can lead to
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 in motorway,
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 threatening the lives of other people.
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,
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 the long roads, some drivers might lose focus because they are using their phones to cure their
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, resulting in accidents. To address the problems
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 motorways, there are several solutions that can be taken by the government.
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, the government can set up a
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 for every 10
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kilometres
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Answer both parts more fully. You write about problems and solutions, but the ideas are not finished.
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Add one more clear problem, such as noise, air pollution, or traffic near cities.
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Explain each idea more. Say why it happens and how the solution can help.
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Give a full ending. Your essay stops in the middle, so there is no real conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear paragraph plan: introduction, problems, solutions, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, because, so, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea and enough support.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and keep the meaning easy to follow.
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You have a clear topic in the introduction.
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You name one real problem: accidents from high speed and phone use.
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You try to give solutions from the government.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic paragraphing and words like firstly and also.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental impact
  • noise pollution
  • wildlife habitats
  • green spaces
  • traffic congestion
  • urban areas
  • high-speed trains
  • public transportation
  • automotive industry
  • urban planning
  • road safety measures
  • speed limits
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