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Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. The metro is the most convenient way to get around a city. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's
fast paced
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fast-paced
 world, every government provides the fundamental facilities to
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its inhabitants
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. In the given context,
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 strongly agree with
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 viewpoint that
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 there should be an encouraging trend of travelling through public transportation, specifically, a
metropoliton
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metropolitan
 train. Which is considered
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the best way to move around the city.
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proponents
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give for the
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 government
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 provide
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 facility to the people is economical nature. Various tasks are achieved by people on
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 basis
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 for that reason, roaming outside and travelling becomes compulsory.
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, commuting to workplaces, universities,
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, and meet-ups. Taking
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advantage of available facility which is budget-friendly is always
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preferred
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, it is more environmentally friendly.
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 personal cars and using them unnecessarily for short distances
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increases
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emissions
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, soaring the pollution and risk of over-crowding and traffic jams. which is ultimately deteriorating for the Earth.
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, to mitigate the threat of
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a polluted
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 atmosphere,
prefering metropolis
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preferring
 to move around the city is beneficial.
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, some
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opponents
 rightly argue that it's time wasting.
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, being a little late
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few
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a few
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 minutes make us suffer because of not being on time. As public trains
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don't
 wait for passengers.
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 on
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travellers
 to arrive
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 station before
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the train
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 arrival time.
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, significant delays are commonly experienced by regular travelling bodies. Even if there are strict rules and regulations, public vehicles could be delayed
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 technical faults or weather conditions
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 may affect the whole
itenarary
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itinerary
 of an individual. Unreliability and lack of punctuality are two main reasons
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why
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 personal conciences are prioritised. In the culmination of the above discussion, we may assert that shifting from one place to another by
meteropolis
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metro
 is advantageous
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 several means
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 pocket-friendly and for
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a healthy
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 nature.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly why you agree, and keep this same idea all through the essay.
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Add one or two clear and real examples to support your main points. This will make your ideas stronger.
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Explain your ideas more fully. Some points are good, but they need more detail to be easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph so the reader knows the main idea quickly.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences jump too fast from one point to another.
coherence and cohesion
Keep your position consistent. You say you strongly agree, but one whole paragraph gives the other side without clearly showing why your view is still stronger.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph plan, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
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You give more than one reason for your opinion, such as cost and the environment.
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You try to discuss both sides, which shows you can look at the topic from different angles.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • delays
  • smoother
  • significant
  • economical
  • extensive
  • frequent
  • accessible
  • alleviate
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • integral
  • comprehensive
  • stimulate
  • efficient
  • promote
  • social inclusion
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