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Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed books or newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying? To what extent, do you agree or disagree with this statement

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With
growing
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the growing
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 popularity of technology, many people believe that printed books or newspapers will be out of favour
due to
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 many individuals
able
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being able
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 to read everything
via
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apply
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online without spending money.
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, I strongly agree with
this
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 view as the printed materials
causes
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cause
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 harmful impect over the environment
due to
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 excessive use of
papers
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paper
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 and plastic,
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 it
cost
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costs
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 a lot of money in
long
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the long
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 run
period
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apply
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, there are many new devices suitable
from
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for
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 reading and
protect
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protecting
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 our vision. I used to use printed items
to
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for
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 studying or reading, with several pages even though I didn't need
it
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them
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 that much, and
at the end
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 of every semester or course I threw them away, without
realizing
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realising
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 the huge impact I caused. On one hand, there are different studies
suggest to save the environment
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suggesting
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 that
caused by printed materials
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printed materials cause environmental damage
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, in order to find other alternatives to help reduce the effect of overuse on our world. By making a habit of online reading significant difference will happen.
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, Kindle devices help the readers to focus more and the primary goal
to
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 become more productive,
also
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 to eliminate the screen time by
labtop
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laptop
 and tablet that causes a range of vision problems in
long
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the long
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 term.
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, spending money on printing and the
overall
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 cost will increase in the future, by using online to read and study or explore the news as much
more
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apply
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easier than before,
also
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 many platforms offer free or
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 price by monthly
subscribe
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subscription
.
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, technology
provide
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provides
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 many
opportunites
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opportunities
 for people to read and get knowledge, by using spesific brand like kendle the benefits outweigh the drawbacks, and highly recommended for being less distracted and
protect
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protecting
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 your eyesight.

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task response
Answer the question more directly in each body part. Show why you agree, and keep that focus all the way.
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Use clearer main ideas. Some ideas are good, but a few are hard to follow because the meaning is not always clear.
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Add more specific examples. One personal example is helpful, but the essay needs more clear support.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main point only. This will help the reader follow your ideas more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'for example', and 'as a result'. Do not join too many ideas in one sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph flow. Some sentences feel disconnected, so the essay needs smoother movement from one idea to the next.
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You clearly give your opinion in the introduction and keep the same side in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
You include both an introduction and a conclusion, which gives the essay a full shape.
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You try to support your ideas with examples such as your own study habit and e-reading devices.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • printed books
  • newspapers
  • online reading
  • digital content
  • paywall
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • environmental impact
  • traditional reading experience
  • ownership
  • personal connection
  • reliability
  • credibility
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
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