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In many countries, the role of education is continuously evolving. Some people believe that traditional education methods, such as lectures and examinations, are the most effective ways to learn. Others argue that new technologies should be incorporated into the education system to enhance the learning experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 is continuously evolving.Some people believe that traditional
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 as lectures and examinations, are the most effective ways to learn. Others argue that new technologies should be incorporated into the
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 system to enhance the learning experience. In
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 we will discsses the both opinions.
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some people believe that traditional
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 will be able to improve their
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solve most of
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Answer both sides more fully, then give your opinion in a clear way.
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Add simple examples to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body part about one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words like First, However, Also, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You discuss both views and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some basic link words like First, Second, Moreover, and In my opinion.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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