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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

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The graph illustrates different sources of
air
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pollutants
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 in the UK from 1990 to 2005, which
is
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are
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 transport, industry, households and total
air
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pollutants
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.
Overall
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, the
pollutant
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 of
indusrty
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industry
 and total
air
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pollutants
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 shares similar route, having a dramatic drop
of all
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throughout
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 the period.
Moreover
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, the
pollutant
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 of households shows
decline
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a decline
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at the end
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.
However
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, the
pollutant
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 of transport shows
the
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apply
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fluctuation. The type of total
air
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pollutants
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 experienced
the
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a
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 significant decrease, from 7
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990 to 3
million
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tonnes
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.
Furthermore
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, the
pollutant
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 of industry shows
similiarity
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similarity
 with total
air
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pollutants
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,which drop dramatically from around 6
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990 to 2
milion
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million
tonnes
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 in 2005.
In addition
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, the
pollutant
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 of households
decrease
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decreased
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 slightly from 1
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990 to
closely
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close to
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 0
million
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tonnes
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 in 2005.
Moreover
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, the
pollutant
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 of transport is the only type
shows
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that shows
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the
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a
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 slight fluctuation in the whole period, which
around
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is around
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 1
million
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tonnes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, pollutant, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emissions
  • Air quality
  • Pollutants
  • Contributing factors
  • Industrial processes
  • Transport sector
  • Household energy
  • Agricultural activities
  • Percentage change
  • Decade
  • Reduction
  • Increase
  • Significantly
  • Fluctuations
  • Trends
  • Sustainable practices
  • Environmental policy
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