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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The map below shows the plan of a university's
sports
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 centre now, and how
centre
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the centre
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 will look after reconstruction.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
sports
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 centre become more bigger and
added
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adding
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 new kinds of features. At the moment, opposite the entrance is the reception. After
reception
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the reception
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 is the 25m
pool
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, on the East
side
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 of the
pool
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located
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,
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 a seating. On the West
side
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 located changing room. At the top of the
pool
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 is
gym
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a gym
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. From
outside
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the outside
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is
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are
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 outdoor courts
in
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on
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 both sides. On the map of future plans,
while
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 reception,
pool
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, seating and changing room remained intact,
gym
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the gym
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 became larger.
In
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At
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 the bottom of the gym
sports
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 hall will
add
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be added
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.
Leisure
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The leisure
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pool
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 is
in
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on
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 the West
side
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 of
25
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the 25
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m
pool
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, which was previously occupied by outdoor courts.
While
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25
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the 25
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m
pool
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 occupied the
center
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centre
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, the dance studios
was
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were
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 in the top of the East.
Except
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Besides
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 all
Linking Words
this
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these
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 new
addings
Replace the word
additions
, there are
also
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 two new changing rooms,
cafe
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a cafe
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 and
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sports
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a sports
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 shop. The new changing rooms are located on the edge of the South on both sides.
Sports
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 shop located next to
changing
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the changing
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 rooms
from
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on
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 the West
side
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,
while
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cafe
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the cafe
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next
Verb problem
is next
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 to
changing
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the changing
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 room that located in the East
side
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.

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Write a clearer overview. Say the main changes in one or two lines.
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Use more exact words for place, like north, south, east, and west, in a clear way.
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Check all main new parts are named and compared with the old plan.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas well. Write one part for the plan now and one part for the new plan.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy link words, like now, after that, while, and also, but use them in the right place.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence simple and clear. This will help the reader follow your ideas.
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You gave an overview of the main idea: the centre will be bigger and have more things.
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You included many key parts of both maps, like the pool, gym, changing room, and new rooms.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay follows a basic order: first the plan now, then the future plan.
coherence and cohesion
You used some link words like while and also.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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