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Band 4.5

People have different views on how to reduce traffic congestion. Some think that governments should build more train and subway lines, while others think that building more roads and widening existing roads will reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
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 have various types of
suggetions
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suggestions
 to reduce
traffic
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congestions
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congestion
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 on
road
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. Of these, some
people
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 think improving train and subway
systems
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 will reduce the
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congestions
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congestion
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,
while
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 others think deveolping
road
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system
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 is a better option. The essay will discuss
,
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 how improving
train
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the train
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system
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 as public
transportation
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 will reduce
the
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traffic
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 rather than extending
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road
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the road
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system
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. Developing trains and
underground
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an underground
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 subway
system
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 is a more effective way to reduce stress in
road
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systems
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.
Usually
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 in busy hours,
traffic
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congestions
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 higher
cause of
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due to
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 higher
road
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 users. If those
road
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 users could switched into the trains, roads
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would
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 become free as usual. Today, most
people
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 tend to use their own vehicles to go to work or
other
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for other
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 essential needs.
This
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 is
cause
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caused
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 by
such
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as
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factors as
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,
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 lack of public
transportation
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 , long waiting periods and
less
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fewer
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 facilities
, if
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. If the
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 government could improve
those errors
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these issues
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,
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people
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People
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 would turn back to trains and subways to
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enjoy
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 these facilities.
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,
road
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extentions
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extensions
 and
the
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building more new roads would be a temporary solution for now, because
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 the vehicle quantity gets higher over
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time, and the same problem may
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 in
near
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the near
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 future. Considering
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 fact, allocating money to develop new railways and improve the current errors in
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system
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the system
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 would be
effective
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an effective
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 way to reduce
road
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congestions
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congestion
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 rather than wasting money on temporary solutions.
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, developing
infrastucture
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infrastructure
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transportation
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,
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 may
incresed
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increase
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government
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the government
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 and
the
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people
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 will find using public trasportation more quicker and
economic advantages
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more economically advantageous
. In conclusion,
depite
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despite
 problems being in train and subway
systems
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, spending most of
money
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the money
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 on
road
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 projects is not a wise idea to reduce
traffic
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congestions
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 in
road
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. Raising
efficiency
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the efficiency
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 of public
transportation
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also
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raising
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raises the
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 efficiency of
road
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systems
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 at the same time.

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task response
Answer both sides more evenly. You write more about trains than roads.
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Give a clearer opinion in the middle and keep it the same to the end.
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Add one or two real and clear examples to support your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use shorter sentences and link ideas in a simpler way.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph order. Put one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words like first, however, for example, and in conclusion.
task response
You discuss both views and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The main idea is usually easy to follow.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation
  • personal vehicles
  • alleviating traffic
  • environmentally friendly
  • pollution levels
  • road infrastructure
  • traffic flow
  • bottlenecks
  • induced demand
  • sustainable solution
  • urban traffic problems
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