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Your next-door neighbor likes to listen to music late at night. Because of the loud music, you often lose sleep. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter describe the situation explain the problems it is causing you offer at least one solution

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Dear John, I am Sandeep Kaur, living in apartment No 12. I am going to complain about my next-door
neighbor
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 who listens to music late at night. As you know, I am a working person. I have to wake up early in the morning. But mr. smith who is adjacent to my apartment, always listens to loud music
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 is not
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 good thing. The sound of music
disturb
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disturbs
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 my sleep
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 am not able to sleep properly at night. Because of that, I feel tired and unable to concentrate on my job. It
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 meek and humble request to take some suitable action to control it. I suggested that you should fix the time to make noise until 10;00 PM. So in
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 way nobody
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 any disturbance.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a little more detail about how often this happens.
task response
Task response: Use a more polite formal style, for example 'I am writing to complain about...'
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are clear, but some lines need better grammar to make the message easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words like 'because', 'so', and 'therefore' in the right places.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one clear idea in each paragraph and check sentence order.
task response
Task response: You describe the problem, say how it affects you, and give a solution.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your paragraphs mostly stay on one main idea.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • loud music
  • late at night
  • lose sleep
  • next-door neighbor
  • shared wall
  • building rules
  • quiet hours
  • speak politely
  • disturbance
  • keep the volume low
  • wake up suddenly
  • hard to focus
  • feel tired
  • daily life
  • solve the problem
  • take action
  • use headphones
  • show respect
  • peaceful environment
  • sleep well
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