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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart illustrates the percentage of visitors to the UK who
attractived
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arrived
 from
different
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the
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 four
categories
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different categories
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 in Brighton.
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, pavilion and pier
experenced
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experienced
 an upward trend,
while
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 festival and art gallery showed a downward trend over the given frame. Looking at the chart in detail, the
proportion
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 of
festival
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festivals
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 stood at 30%, which was the highest
proportion
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 among all reasons at the beginning of the
period
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. After that, it declined slightly by around 5% untill to the end of the
period
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. Moving
the
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to the art gallery, the
proportion
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 accounted for 20% in 1980, and climbed significantly to around 40%. Following five years , it
droped
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dropped
 to 20%, and
than
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then
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 decreased
graduately
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gradually
 to under 10% in the
initail
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initial
 year. When it comes to pavilion, the
proportion
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 made up apporximately 20% in 1980. Following the next 15 years, the percentage reached a peak of about 50%, which was the
higest
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highest
proportion
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 of the
period
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 among all categories of attractions. After that, it dropped by 20% in the final of the
period
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. Notably, the
proportion
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 of the pier
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started
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 at 10% in 1980, which was the lowest
proportion
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 among the
others
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other
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 categories.
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, the
proportion
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remaind
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remained
 ranged from 10% to 15% in 2005, and
then
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 it increased to roughly 20%
at the end
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 of the
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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